Fabulous Writing Celebration!

Hi Everyone! Today I'll be talking about my writing celebration. A writing celebration is that you share any writing you've done this year or term. I've chose the one that I did today because it was my record of writing the most words 364 words and the story had good punctuation. It even had a cute little animal that was a koala and he joined me and Levi's clan he was named Smart Koko but this happened in the story.

One day there were two brave astronauts called Levi and myself Sahil. We were looking for a great huge planet that has heaps of trees and water which is earth. The planet had to have food/ animals/cows, chickens for food and sheep to get some warm clothes. Earth is as big as 99 giants.  As soon as I put my foot on the ground I felt dizzy. I went to drink some water because it was clean and all of the trees were strong and gigantic. The people chose me to protect this planet and Levi fell asleep so I had to do it on my own. They chose me because l Levi was asleep and I had defeated a dragon before.  All of a sudden I heard a roar RRRRR OOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRR it was terrifying and I ran away and everybody hid in a bush. There were a bunch of dragons. Maybe 17 dragons one even had 37 heads and the rest had 4 heads that means they all had at least 8 eyes. So they can see lots.  I put on my invisible suit and I was invisible so was the spaceship and Levi but he was still sleeping so maybe he didn’t get to sleep last night. I sliced their legs, I climbed the 37 dragon and he only had   heads. So he flew away and crashed into a rock mountain and I never saw him again. The rest of the dragons followed him.  A cute little animal came up to me and said can I have food because he said there was a guy that keeps on showing up and stealing his food. The animal was a Koala. He was very smart. He gave me an idea so he tied a rope to a tree and we waited for him to come and he tripped over the rope and I got him.  Next the Koala joined me and Levi’s clan and he was named Smart Koko. Levi finally woke up and said what happened and we all started laughing hehehehe. Whenever there’s an emergency Koko will always come and whenever he’s hungry he can eat. Nobody bothered planet earth again.

Success Criteria
Student	Features of Text	Teacher
	I have included a beginning, middle and an end.
	I have included a problem & solved it.
	I have written a satisfying ending. I haven’t written ‘The End’
	I have included the characters thoughts and feelings.
	I have used a simile.
	I have used a set of three adjectives.
	I have iSPACE sentence starters.
	My sentences are punctuated (A . ! ? ,)
What I am proud of: I am proud of how I put the cute little Koala in my story. It was fun to have him in my story. What I want to  improve on next time: To improve next time I should put sets of 3 adjectives and ispace sentence starters.